For World Book Day worked together to create a narrative story based around an image. Each pupil in the class contributed their own section of the story.

Year 4 you have already produced some great writing this year, so I look forward to seeing what you come up with.

As Tom made his way down the creaky, wooden steps to the eerie basement, he was filled with fear. The noises had been getting louder and louder the closer he got. Knees knocking and legs shaking he made his way further down. His heart was pounding. He was sure he had seen the doorknob turn…





  • 32 Comments

    Maddison · 17th January 2017 at 6:44 pm

    … as he grew closer the doorknob kept on turning. SUDDENLY the door burst open! Tom squinted to see through the door and was swept up into a swirling, hypnotising tornado. Whilst he was in the dark tornado, he could see all sorts of things swirling around him. Tom became very dizzy and sleepy and actually fell asleep. When he awoke, he was surprised to find himself…

    Lucian · 18th January 2017 at 4:43 pm

    on a deserted island in the middle of the ocean! On this island half of it was rain forest full of skeleton dinosaurs and the other half was a desert. But if you would dare walk in it, it becomes never ending. As Tom walked into the towering rain forest it began to get dark,cold and he felt uneasy. He went to get some wood to make a fire but also found a pack of ferocious, man-eating raptors.

    Imogen.Gillooley · 20th January 2017 at 1:34 pm

    As the flesh eating raptors circled Tom he was too unfocused to think of a plan. Tom tried and tried again to escape but SUDDENLY the nightmarish, bloodthirsty raptors went for him at full speed. He had to get out of there! Tom looked around for an escape route but his only options were the maze-like, deserted rain forest or the desolate, arid desert. His only choice was to jump into the ice cold water. Exhausted, isolated, petrified Tom swam as quick as he could away from the island but a towering wave soon engulfed him and carried Tom to the middle of the deep blue sea with no islands to be seen.

    Callum Morton · 20th January 2017 at 7:21 pm

    Tom swam for what felt like days, searching for the island. SUDDENLY in the corner of his eye he spotted a large, brown ship full of pirates. Before he could swim away Captain Blackbeard grabbed him and pulled him overboard. The large, ferocious looking pirates turned their attention onto Tom. He tried to jump off the ship and escape but Blackbeard caught him and said, “You can be our slave”. Blackbeard ordered Tom to scrub the deck. He couldn’t say no because he would have to jump into the ice cold water again and there were ravenous Great White sharks going in circles, ready to have their lunch!

    Hollie Salmon · 23rd January 2017 at 4:40 pm

    He decided he would have to stay in the despicable boat and mop the deck, rather than take a chance with the sharks. Suddenly he had a brainwave! He said “If I go in the cannon Blackbeard can shoot me when the battle starts and then I will get shot back to the island.” As the cannon burst, it shot Tom out like a bullet from a gun. Tom soared through the air towards the island. He was close but he missed and landed in another pirate ship. He would soon discover that this one was more despicable than the last. Was he ever going to get out?

    Joshua Wardlow · 25th January 2017 at 7:59 am

    Tom landed with a thud. He got up and looked around, then in the corner of his eye he saw a ferocious looking pirate wearing blue clothes and a golden belt. He glared at Tom and shouted at the top of his voice, “What are you doing here, intruder?”
    “I am doing nothing,” Tom explained.
    “So if you are doing nothing, you will have to walk the plank,” the pirate instructed. The pirate pushed Tom to the end of the plank. Tom stared at the three Mako sharks snapping hungrily below, petrified of what would happen next.

      Mr Cockcroft

      Mr Cockcroft · 26th January 2017 at 8:43 am

      Crikey Year 4, I don’t think I’ll have any finger nails left by the time you’ve finished!

    Laura Mcloughlin · 25th January 2017 at 4:15 pm

    Cautiously and nervously he walked along the plank filled with fear. His knees were knocking and teeth were chattering. The ferocious looking pirates pushed Tom even closer to the edge. Tom took his time, hoping they might set him free. The pirates weren’t sure if he was going to jump so they decided to push him. Tom fell with a giant splash into the deep, blue ocean and started to sink. He tried to swim up towards the surface but he failed. He was sinking closer to the ocean bed and was getting worried. With the hungry sharks close behind him ready to eat their prey, suddenly something big came to save Tom.

    Joshua Berry · 26th January 2017 at 5:25 pm

    Just then a big, blue sea gorilla came to the rescue, riding a giant whale. The gorilla grabbed Tom by the left leg and dragged him through the ocean out of sight of the sharks. They past through some underwater tunnels until eventually he saw something in the distance. It looked like an underwater jungle with soaring dark green, maze like trees. “It can’t be,” thought Tom. He got closer and closer until he discovered what he could see (well, what he thought he could see) was true. Hovering above him were blue sea monkeys and yellow sea orangutans who were swinging around on the vines like gymnasts.

    Gracie Shackcloth · 30th January 2017 at 12:35 pm

    Tom finally reached the middle of the tall jungle with the sharks nowhere in sight and felt relived to have escaped their clutches. He got told by the sea gorilla to go into the lofty rectangular building, covered in seaweed, which was in front of him. Scared, worried, confused he quietly tip toed inside to see a mini school. Inside there were 25 demented pigs running around like headless chickens. As he looked up he saw A QUEEN PIG.The Queen pig was named Jennifer and she ordered him to go and find some treasures to earn money. On his way back from finding the last treasure something villanously evil flew over Tom’s head and caught him. “What am I going to do now?” asked Tom nervously as the school building disappeared into the distance.

    Max Cross · 30th January 2017 at 4:27 pm

    I can’t wait for my turn! I have great ideas 🙂 Well done everyone!

    Leo Stapleton-Walker · 30th January 2017 at 4:52 pm

    Tom got pulled along by a mysterious, orange-suited bearded figure. He pulled Tom further and further away. As Tom got pulled even further he reached an extremely old, rusty shipwreck. They explored the shipwreck together, searching for any sign of treasures that might lie below. The mysterious person dragged Tom into the open sea and in the distance he could see a glass basement filled with starfish. Soon, they reached the basement and surprisingly, it was filed with air. Tom looked around the basement and enquired, “Why have you got all this?”
    “Go and get some starfish and stop asking questions!” demanded Aquaman, thumping his trident onto the glass flooring then handed Tom an air-ball to breathe underwater.

    Daisy Kay · 1st February 2017 at 1:49 pm

    As Tom swam in search of some starfish for Aqua-man, he happened to pass a dark cave surrounded by some ferocious, hungry looking sharks. He cautiously swam towards the cave trying not to get caught. SUDDENLY right in front of Tom’s eyes was a big, growling shark with his razor sharp teeth on show. Tom thought if sharks are guarding this cave that means there’s bound to be something good in there. Luckily, Tom knew how to speak shark language. After the conversation with the shark, Tom went into the cave and saw lots and lots of golden, glistening starfish shining as bright as stars in the sky. He quickly swam back to Aqua-man to tell him about the most magnificent thing he had ever seen.

    Kian bell · 1st February 2017 at 6:31 pm

    Tom saw a beautiful, dark blue whale approaching from in the distance right ahead of him. The whale had three little babies under her, keeping them safe. They asked Tom if he needed a lift, he said no because he was trying to sneak past the sharks and enter the cave.
    “Wait a second, please can you help me guys?” he asked quietly.
    Whilst swimming to safety with the helpful dark blue whales, out of nowhere the sea turned crystal clear. On the sea bed below him, peeking out of the glistening, golden sand he spotted a big dark pink starfish.
    “Jackpot!” Tom shouted.

    Amelia Khan · 2nd February 2017 at 6:26 pm

    Tom rushed to the starfish as soon as possible. He reached down to grab the magnificent creature but it suddenly started to move so fast. Tom’s hand seemed to be caught in something and he was being dragged along. Everything was rushing by so fast that his brain couldn’t process what was going on. He soon became disorientated. Was that a bright light? Yes, hooray he was back at the surface! It was the bright sun shining in his eyes and … was that a mermaid that had hold of his hand? Yes, yes it was indeed a mermaid and she was the most beautiful thing he had ever seen!

    Kelly morton · 2nd February 2017 at 9:25 pm

    Well done callum amazing work xxx well done year 4 too ☺

    Bobby Kelly Leigh · 5th February 2017 at 9:53 am

    The mermaid was called Princess Ella. She told Tom that the golden starfish had magical powers and if he touched it, he would be able to defeat Aquaman and become King of the ocean! Tom was even more desperate to get the starfish now and become king of the ocean. He asked Princess Ella to take him to the golden starfish as soon as possible. They started their mission but suddenly a blood thirsty tiger shark appeared out of nowhere and tried to eat them! Tom screamed and looked like a balloon that was going to burst “AHHHHHH!” Fortunately, Ella’s friends the fifty mighty dolphins appeared and scared the horrid tiger shark away. Tom and Ella were relieved and said thank you to the dolphins. As they were just about to get the golden starfish, a strange mysterious shadow appeared and then a light, shining as bright as the sun, from above. It looked like a spaceship, Tom and Ella gasped…

    Amelia Vaudrey · 6th February 2017 at 9:29 pm

    The hovering object over Tom and Princess Ella’s head was not a spaceship, it was in fact a light blue submarine. As it came closer, a hatch on the bottom of the ship opened and suddenly a mysterious man floated down towards them. Tom and Ella had no clue who it was or what he wanted. The man began to shout ” Tom, is that you? I’m your long lost brother. If it is you I’m so lucky that I can finally see you for the first time.”
    Tom answered back explaining who he was, “It is me Tom, are you really my brother? This is princess Ella my friend and we are going on a quest to get some majestic golden starfish”
    “Hello there sir, do you want to come on the quest with us?” Ella asked kindly. The man’s name was Jay.
    Jay replied ” Of course if that is ok with you and Tom?”
    So they set off on their journey but there was something strange in the distance. It was large and brightly coloured …

    Max Cross · 8th February 2017 at 1:13 pm

    As they cautiously made their way closer to the neon, dark blue and yellow object they began to see what it was. It was a Walrus!
    “Come with me and you will find the majestic, golden starfish,” he explained.
    They gasped! ” What? How can you talk and what is your name?”
    “I am Wally the Walrus, how do you do?”
    “We are fine, but we are currently locating the majestic, golden starfish!”
    “Ok now follow me then.”
    They made their way through the deep, blue ocean. Unfortunately Wally got lost and found his little brother TJ the Walrus!
    “Hi Wally, what are you up to?”
    “Hey TJ me and these fellow chaps are locating the golden starfish!”
    “Ok follow me” he exclaimed.
    They made their way through the ocean, past some colourful coral and then, they appeared to be at the entrance to a cave and they could see the starfish inside! There was a group of poisonous, stingy jellyfish and there was a KING Jellyfish named Patrick.
    “If you want the golden, majestic starfish you will have to answer a quiz!”
    How would they get past this stingy situation?

    Max Cross · 8th February 2017 at 6:54 pm

    Everyone enjoyed my comment! Big thanks to Callum and Gracie for helping me with the ideas and thanks to Miss Bowman for choosing me and everyone else for editing it! I almost wrote the whole rest of the story as I got carried away! Well done everyone! I wonder what Heidi is going to put in her turn tonight?!

    Heidi Mooney · 8th February 2017 at 7:51 pm

    Wally and TJ wished Ella, Tom and Jay a happy and safe journey, and swam back into the ocean. Tom, Ella and Jay decided to approach Patrick (the King jelly fish)
    “Good evening your jellyness. We are in search of the golden starfish. Your cave is looking lovely and shiny today” whispered Tom
    “SILENCE!!!!” ordered the king. “You dare to come and ask me for the most famous beautiful gem of the ocean?”
    Tom replied,”I’ve scrambled through jungles, been made to walk the plank and chased by ravenous sharks. All I want is to go home.
    “Mmmm” sighed the King, thinking for a moment. “I have 3 riddles for you to answer. Before I allow you to pass you must answer them…..”

    1) Where do fish keep their money?
    2) How do oysters call their friends?
    3) Which fish is the most famous?

    Louis Bucher · 9th February 2017 at 5:29 pm

    Tom had no clue what it could be but Ella had an idea, she said “In a river bank?”.
    “Well done, now for the second question,” the king jellyfish explained. Tom and Ella didn’t know but Tom spotted out of the corner of his eye a piece of paper, on closer inspection it said on a shell phone so Tom decided to give that a try. “On a shell phone?” he shouted.
    The king replied “That is correct, now for the next question”.
    Tom suggested a shark but out of nowhere the Queen jellyfish appeared and shouted,”THAT IS INCORRECT! PREPARE FOR THE ROYAL PUNISHMENT! You will be locked away until you can tell me the correct answer.”
    The shark guards marched them to the coral dungeon deep below the cave. When Tom and Ella arrived they were both looking for an escape route. Ella touched a loose rock and the walls began to move, a secret passage appeared before them. Eventually they began to swim down the long dark tunnel, not giving up hope as they could see a glimmer of light in the distance. They discussed between themselves where it would take them. When they finally arrived and passed through the opening at the end of the tunnel they gasped in shock as they could not believe what they could see in front of them.
    They found themselves in a room of gold with an opening on the other side, so they proceeded through the room but before they could leave a crab crawled in their way.
    “You cannot pass with my treasure” commanded the crab. Once Tom and Ella had proved to the crab they had not taken any treasure, the crab was pleased and they were allowed to continue their journey to find the golden starfish. Tom and Ella emerged from the golden room and a big wave pushed them to a new location.

    When the sand settled they could not believe what they could see before them…

    Millie Pearson · 10th February 2017 at 5:35 pm

    It was a colourful coral reef. Tom and Ella gasped at the amazing sight infront of them. They swam up towards the shining sun above the ocean. Eventually they reached the surface and gazed around. “WE’RE IN THE GREAT BARRIER REEF”! exclaimed Ella. Tom was shocked at the amount of colourful fish swimming around his feet and Ella’s fin. Tom and Ella started to swim back down to the sea bed where they were met by an orange and white Clownfish named Nemo. Nemo asked “What are you looking for?”
    “We are looking for the golden starfish” Tom replied.
    “The golden starfish? Follow me!” said Nemo excitedly.

    While they were swimming they saw different shoals of fish. There were Angelfish, Butterflyfish, Gobies, Groupers and Parrotfish. The different colours bounced through the clear water like big, bright, bouncy balls. Ella thought it was the most beautiful sight she had ever seen.
    Just then a huge Hammerhead shark was spotted by Tom. He warned Ella but before they could escape they were engulfed by the hammerheads enormous jaws. He didn’t chew, but with one large gulp they found themselves sliding down his oesophagus.
    Tom and Ella turned to face each other, Nemo was nowhere to be seen. In unison they exclaimed “How are we ever going to get out of this slimy situation?”

    Jake Grundy · 13th February 2017 at 3:08 pm

    Tom and Ella panicked, desperately trying to find a way out. Suddenly, Ella noticed something shiny in the corner of the sharks stomach. She went to take a closer look…it was a metal, sharp hammer. She shouted to Tom, “I’ve found a hammer! This will help us to escape!”
    Ella gave the hammer to Tom and he swung with all his might and hit the shark from the inside. A great big beam of light suddenly appeared; the shark had opened it’s mouth! Once Tom and Ella were out, Tom hit the shark in his eye. The shark became very, very dizzy and swam away.
    Finally, Tom and Ella were free!

    That evening, Tom and Ella were still looking for Nemo, as he knew where the golden starfish was. Suddenly, they found Nemo stuck under a huge, grey rock. Tom and Ella swam down to try and rescue Nemo, when they noticed that they still had the hammer. They hit the huge, grey rock and it cracked in two halves and Nemo was finally free. Ella asked Nemo where the golden starfish was, to which he replied, “You will find the golden starfish in a place where darkness falls with haunted creatures and secret traps.”
    Tom and Ella looked at each other, scared of what might happen next. Nemo took Tom and Ella to the mysterious cave of doom. They stared at the cave for a while, wondering what to do next.
    “We need to find a way in!” exclaimed Tom.
    Tom and Ella began to swim towards the cave. They remembered about the hammer and used it to destroy the rocks that were blocking the way in.

    Tom and Ella found themselves in the middle of a dark, mysterious and ferocious cave. They spotted the starfish and began to swim towards it. Suddenly, “SLAM!” A sharp, metal door appeared before them, blocking their way and trapping Nemo.
    Tom and Ella panicked.
    “We need to get out of here!” shouted Ella.
    Just as they neared the cave door, “SLAM!” Another sharp, metal door appeared, locking them all inside.

    They were all trapped…

    Evie Kirk · 13th February 2017 at 4:41 pm

    As they were trapped in the dark, creepy cave Tom found a suspicious-looking lever to his right hand side. He pulled it to see what would happen. The lever was actually for a trap. BOOM! Tom, Ella and Nemo disappeared in a flash down a trap door. They found themselves in another cave but this time there was a door to escape. As they swam to it suddenly they got a fierce blow to the back of their heads. It was a shark, a very angry shark that wasn’t going to let them easily escape without a fight!

    Tom woke up in an electrical cage and found the shark in front of him preparing his jaws and teeth ready to bite. Ella and Nemo were still knocked out on the floor beside him. Tom realised he still had his metal hammer, so he swung it at the metal bars with all his might and SLAM! But this was no ordinary shark, this was a talking shark, “HOW DARE YOU USE YOUR WEIRD MAGICAL HAMMER TO DESTROY MY CAGE! shouted the shark.
    “That’s right cry,” Tom replied back.
    “Too bad your little friends aren’t awake.”
    Tom was filled with anger, ready to erupt like a volcano. Tom hit the cage with all his strength which woke Ella and Nemo. The shark got so angry that he looked like he could explode. As the shark focused on his prey Tom knew he had to do something. Raising the metal hammer above his head, he brought it down onto the shark, hitting him square between the eyes. As the three friends made their getaway they were relieved to have escaped the shark’s company.

    Eilah Salmon · 14th February 2017 at 3:23 pm

    But more danger lay ahead of them! As they made their bid to escape they were met by even more ferocious looking sharks. Tom, Ella and Nemo now found themselves in Shark Mania. Wherever they looked there were ravenous, blood-thirsty beasts. How would they manage to escape this one? They could see a figure in the distance, could this be help? There was only two options: death or life! Tom, Ella and Nemo swam as fast as they could towards the figure in the distance hoping this was the best option. As they got closer the figure became clearer and they recognised the pirate standing before them, it was Blackbeard! Beside him, was another pirate, one they had not seen yet. Once they reached the ship, Blackbeard pulled them aboard and introduced the smaller pirate. “This is my son, Bluebeard and he is the most helpful pirate on the seven seas. He will help you retrieve the golden starfish.”

    Elizabeth Smithies · 15th February 2017 at 7:05 pm

    “We would be grateful for Bluebeard to accompany us” said Tom. So when the blood-thirsty sharks lost interest Tom, Ella, Nemo and Bluebeard embarked on their journey underwater.
    “My dad told me there is a rumour that the golden starfish is hidden in an abandoned city that now lies deep in the ocean” explained Bluebeard as they were swimming down .They all looked at each other in confusion except from Bluebeard.
    “How will we ever get deep down into the ocean?” asked Ella. Suddenly something went BOOM Tom’s air-ball shattered like glass! Everyone was shocked when it shattered. Then Bluebeard had an idea he took them all to his rich blue, shiny submarine.They climbed in and saw two piles at either side of the room, one of them was a pile of gold and the other was a pile of maps. “Look in the pile of maps because I am sure I have a map of the ocean and a map of the city. These will help us on our journey to the bottom of the sea. So Nemo and Tom started searching whilst Ella and Bluebeard started up the submarine. Their quest to get to the abandoned city had begun…

    Shaun Nicholson · 16th February 2017 at 2:19 pm

    After a few hours of searching for the map Tom found it in the massive pile. They all felt very excited and proud of themselves. “Can we have a look around your beautiful submarine please?” asked Tom, Bluebeard said this was okay and off they went. There was a wooden steering wheel and in front of it was a huge window. Tom and Ella could see an octopus climbing the bumpy red rocks in the ocean, suddenly the octopus saw them, it turned around and shook the submarine angrily.

    Alfie Taylor and Mr Stanhope · 16th February 2017 at 3:29 pm

    The giant octopus shook the submarine so hard that it broke apart and they all fell out and floated down to the ocean bottom. The octopus chased them down and grabbed them all in his eight tentacles. It was very dark and they all shook with fear but the octopus didn’t eat them, he just changed colour to a bright red which lit up the ocean around them. This revealed a gigantic cave into which he swam. Sat inside, surrounded by mermaids and fishes of all sorts, sat King Neptune himself!

    He was a fabulous being, half man and half sea serpent, wearing a huge bushy beard, glittering crown and holding a trident. To their astonishment he wore a huge golden starfish around his neck! Just what they were looking for. The octopus released them and pushed them in front of the king. In a deep booming voice he demanded “Why are you trespassing in my watery realm?” Tom explained their adventure in a stuttering voice ending with their quest to find the golden starfish. Neptune roared with laughter and watery tears rolled down his cheeks He boomed “This bauble around my neck?” They nodded quickly. “Why of course” he replied “I will give you this golden starfish and even take you home if, and only if……..you can beat my pet octopus in a game of snap!!”
    They all gasped and started talking at once. “How can we do that when he has eight arms and we’ve only got two?” Neptune smiled slyly and said, “You didn’t expect me to make it easy for you, did you?” They all sat down around a huge coral table and the octopus placed the pack of cards in front of them. Quick as a flash the octopus took a card and hissed at Tom, “Your turn.” Tom winked at Ella and Bluebeard, who shuffled around the table, until they were next to the octopus. Tom nodded his head and they started tickling the octopus under his arms. The octopus wriggled and giggled, meanwhile Tom picked up the pack and found a pair of matching cards. “SNAP!!!” Tom shouted.

    King Neptune was furious but they’d beaten his octopus (with a bit of cheating!) However, the king soon calmed down, took the golden starfish from around his neck and gave it to Tom. Neptune waved his huge trident and everywhere around them started to melt. They felt a floating sensation and the next thing they remembered was riding on the back of a huge dolphin towards a beautiful beach. They jumped off the huge dolphin, waved goodbye and walked onto the sand clutching the beautiful starfish. They recognised that the beach was near where they lived so Tom waved goodbye to Ella and Bluebeard before turning for home.
    “I wonder what I shall tell my mum?” Tom thought as he set off along the road. It will take a while to tell her everything but I’m sure she’ll be impressed with Tom’s Titanic Tale!!

    Miss Bowman · 17th February 2017 at 8:24 am

    What a brilliant story Year 4! Tom certainly went on a titanic adventure! I am very proud of you all and your brilliant effort to make our story brilliant.

      Daisy Kay · 2nd March 2017 at 5:36 pm

      I agree

    Daisy Kay · 2nd March 2017 at 5:34 pm

    I’ve just read all of our book in my room by my self

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